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Dear God,

I think maybe you're being a little critical when you call what we do 'sinning.'

I think

Maybe

We all just
HURT.
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:iconvelocity07:
velocity07 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011
Brilliant. :heart:
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012
Thanks <3
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velocity07 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012
You're welcome. :D
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amorefidelis Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I think He's not being critical when we commit sin...

He's just hurting. :)

He loves us so much it pains Him when we deceived ourselves to things that aren't really necessary..

His Love is just amazing. :D
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2011
You seem to have a story. Care to share?
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:iconamorefidelis:
amorefidelis Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I think sometimes God let us feel pain and doesn't answer our prayers, and doesn't always give our desires for good reasons.

If we are depressed, sometimes it would be beneficial for us, to just accept things, and realized, that in that lonely and ugly times we have, God wants to weep with us, and shares with us the pain we are suffering. He's embracing us the moment we are in sorrow, and is there for us, aS a loving Father, who won't live us in either ups or downs of our lives.
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MidnightStatic Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
Now this... this makes sense. Thank you for writing this. :heart:
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
I'm glad to hear it ^^ you're welcome... and thank you? Haha :) :heart:
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shinypancakes Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
I agree.
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
:)
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:iconzexy-n-me:
Zexy-n-me Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh, I love this so hard. It's like everything I feel just stuffed into so few words. Thank you for writing this, it's short but perfect. I wish I could favorite it a million times.
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
wow thank you so much! :heart: :)
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AnnamaeTezuka Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I love these words. They speak so, so true.
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
Thank you... :heart:
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:iconannamaetezuka:
AnnamaeTezuka Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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ilike2draw Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010   Writer
I really like this. Great job.
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
thanks!
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:iconilike2draw:
ilike2draw Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010   Writer
You're welcome.
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010   Writer
A very interesting concept.
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
thanks!
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I suggested this to :devwritte-religion: :)
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
Thanks! :blowkiss:
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vespera Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
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forWinds Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
now i'm not exactly religious in any way, but i do agree with this. sometimes we just need to know that what we feel and do is alright, not a sin, but just a hurt like you say that needs to be expressed. we all enjoy sympathy from time to time instead of critical judgment. :) that's what i got out of this, anyway.
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
Awesome :) I love hearing people's perspectives and interpretations :heart: thanks for commenting!
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:iconforwinds:
forWinds Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome. :)
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supermariposa Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
I clicked on this expecting a big monologue... this was even better. Simple and perfect :)
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
:)
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rookyWriter Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
too tired to coment.
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
haha ^^
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sourseas-sweetskies Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I love this to pieces. I wish I could give some critique, but in my eyes, this is flawless.
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Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
Thank you! That's high praise ^^ :heart:
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sourseas-sweetskies Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! I just love how bold and to-the-point this piece is. Nothing flowery, nothing purple. It's like a firm slap to the face, but in the best kind of way, like the ones seen in the movies where the groom is too nervous to enter the church (See what I did there?) so his friend has to let him have it. Then, he says, "Thanks, I really needed that!" and he walks inside and the wedding goes on.

This piece goes to show that a poem doesn't have to be filled to the brim with literary devices. Sometimes, a poem can be simple, something someone would say in everyday conversation. And that, I think, is the magic of this little work of art you have here. Thank you so much for sharing!
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Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
Thank you! Yeah, I like everyday language in poetry I think it makes it more relatable :) I actually wrote this and then chopped it down a bunch because I thought, like you said - it didn't need all the fluff to make its point. Thank for commenting! I appreciate the feedback! :tighthug:
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JasonVoorheesMyLover Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
true dat :nod:
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
:) thank you :heart:
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:iconjasonvoorheesmylover:
JasonVoorheesMyLover Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome :aww:
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:icondreamingyournitemare:
i love this :heart:

off to your gallery i go!
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:iconjayendor:
Jayendor Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2010
haha! Thanks <3 :)
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